I stare down at Sandra’s makeup mirror balanced on the edge of the white porcelain sink. The last of my coke is chopped in two straight lines and I know I shouldn’t but I probably will.
Just now before I lied and said I had to piss, she told me to stop or we were done.
Said she’d brought so much into this relationship and I was killing it, killing us, killing her.
I said I had no more coke but she’s not stupid. She knows me and my secrets. I’m no mystery. She’s a goddess and I’m a demon-vampire sucking her life away and I can’t stop but I tell her I can. She knows I’m a liar even though I don’t want to be. I say I gotta piss and go into the bathroom. She doesn’t say goodbye.
I did my last two bumps today. I swear to God, I swear to Sandra but they’ve both gone and left me here alone. I can’t even see myself in her mirror anymore.
Wow. Punchy, I like this!
A menage a trois, man, woman, Charlie… And none of their selfish vectors really intersect at all.
Nice geometry of relationships
Short and tragically realistic. Poor guy. Sometimes we make all of the wrong choices. Great job illustrating this suffering man and doing it in a small space. Sometimes less is more.
Great snapshot of the frustration and pain of addiction. The last line is singed with sad truth. Enjoyed.
I really liked this! Last sentences bring pain.
Slice brings out the pain. Sharp.
I love the last line about how he can’t even see himself in the mirror anymore. It’s metaphoric on so many levels. Fantastic!
Excellent, honest face of an addict. Great job, Chris. Peace, Linda
Ouch. Short but not sweet. You paint a very painful picture with just a few short lines. Very well done.
The last 3 sentences pack a sledgehammer punch. Nicely done
Short and tragic. Very well written. The hopelessness of both of them comes through well.
Well written and moving, especially about how they all left him.
Amazingly poignant in such a few lines – very impressive.
Existential, especialy this: “I swear to God, I swear to Sandra but they’ve both gone and left me here alone.” And these two plus coke are necessary for the formation of proper reflections. Good, concise picture Chris.
Simon.
Very well written. Good story.
LOVE the ending.