Comments on: Deceptions and Aliens

By: Eric J. Krause

Eric J. Krause — Sun, 07 Feb 2010 18:24:15 +0000

The break in the voice and story at the end made me laugh. That’s quite a neat writing prompt. I may have to try it sometime. The quick turn to science fiction was a good choice.

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Sat, 06 Feb 2010 21:01:26 +0000

Crazy hilarious. Those first 2 starter paragraphs were painful. Enjoyed the direction you took it in, and glad you dived full in with a big splash. It’s an interesting idea starting from a random paragraph.

By: Laura Eno

Laura Eno — Sat, 06 Feb 2010 20:23:27 +0000

Hilarious! I love what you did with it. Handy bit a writing there. (the part you had to start from was awful!)

By: Sam

Sam — Sat, 06 Feb 2010 20:03:09 +0000

LMAO!!! This is absolutely wonderful! I haven’t giggled this much in ages. Encore!

By: Maria Kelly

Maria Kelly — Sat, 06 Feb 2010 19:58:54 +0000

I love it! “It’s been too long since I’ve had something between my legs that wasn’t plugged into the wall.”Hysterically funny line. Bravo!

By: Jules

Jules — Sat, 06 Feb 2010 19:23:59 +0000

I was thinking, “Ooooh, sexy.” Then, I was grinning. Then, I was grossing out. Then, I was surprised! This was good.

By: vivi

vivi — Sat, 06 Feb 2010 17:57:02 +0000

It was quite entertaining envisioning romance Garth then eating him.

By: John Pender

John Pender — Sat, 06 Feb 2010 15:00:58 +0000

I really liked the cliche! And how she ate him at the end.
Here’s my entry.
http://johnpender.net/2010/02/fiction-friday-141/

By: CJ

CJ — Sat, 06 Feb 2010 15:00:27 +0000

Ha! I love the quick end… just what I would have done to get out of that scene. ew romance

By: shannon esposito

shannon esposito — Sat, 06 Feb 2010 14:53:37 +0000

Laughing & shaking my head here. You are one brave soul to tackle that hot mess. The fact that you decided an alien’s mouth tastes like Gouda is very very funny to me! I think you should do another humor-sci-fi, this was fun!