Comments on: His Due http://thedarkeagle.com/his-due/ Official Home Page of Author, Christopher Chartrand Fri, 03 Feb 2012 00:02:12 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.2.1 By: PJ Kaiser http://thedarkeagle.com/his-due/comment-page-1/#comment-1116 PJ Kaiser Sun, 24 Jan 2010 03:36:01 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=203#comment-1116 I liked this piece and i thought the device worked well also. My only thought would be to make sure that each segment packs a punch. Most of the lines made me go "hmmm - ok, now we've learned ... thus and so" - just make sure that each bit has the punch you envision in your mind. Very well done and i love the deal with the devil scenario :-) I liked this piece and i thought the device worked well also. My only thought would be to make sure that each segment packs a punch. Most of the lines made me go “hmmm – ok, now we’ve learned … thus and so” – just make sure that each bit has the punch you envision in your mind. Very well done and i love the deal with the devil scenario :-)

]]> By: ganymeder http://thedarkeagle.com/his-due/comment-page-1/#comment-1115 ganymeder Sat, 23 Jan 2010 22:04:56 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=203#comment-1115 I loved the style you used, spacing the news with the actual dialogue. Why do people making wishes never learn to be more specific? Great job. I loved the style you used, spacing the news with the actual dialogue. Why do people making wishes never learn to be more specific?

Great job.

]]> By: danpowell http://thedarkeagle.com/his-due/comment-page-1/#comment-1109 danpowell Wed, 20 Jan 2010 19:56:09 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=203#comment-1109 Ooops hit submit before I was finsished. Perhaps a further, final revelation in the news report could provide something more at the close. Ooops hit submit before I was finsished.

Perhaps a further, final revelation in the news report could provide something more at the close.

]]> By: danpowell http://thedarkeagle.com/his-due/comment-page-1/#comment-1108 danpowell Wed, 20 Jan 2010 19:53:18 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=203#comment-1108 The inter-cutting of the two strands works well. That side works, though the ending when they come together might benefit from further work. The inter-cutting of the two strands works well. That side works, though the ending when they come together might benefit from further work.

]]> By: Peter Etherington http://thedarkeagle.com/his-due/comment-page-1/#comment-1104 Peter Etherington Tue, 19 Jan 2010 13:03:08 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=203#comment-1104 Brilliant structure to this, loved the interspersed news report. A good spin on the 'deal with the devil/unpleasant person' idea. Brilliant structure to this, loved the interspersed news report. A good spin on the ‘deal with the devil/unpleasant person’ idea.

]]> By: Laurita http://thedarkeagle.com/his-due/comment-page-1/#comment-1102 Laurita Tue, 19 Jan 2010 02:32:59 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=203#comment-1102 Nice set up, great story. Loved the ending. Nice set up, great story. Loved the ending.

]]> By: Carrie Clevenger http://thedarkeagle.com/his-due/comment-page-1/#comment-1099 Carrie Clevenger Mon, 18 Jan 2010 02:02:37 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=203#comment-1099 I enjoyed the flip-flopping very much. Very well done Chris. I enjoyed the flip-flopping very much. Very well done Chris.

]]> By: Deanna Schrayer http://thedarkeagle.com/his-due/comment-page-1/#comment-1098 Deanna Schrayer Sun, 17 Jan 2010 23:51:25 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=203#comment-1098 Love the concept here Chris, and you delivered well in a short space. I too like the "desperate get desperate" line very much. Good work! Love the concept here Chris, and you delivered well in a short space. I too like the “desperate get desperate” line very much. Good work!

]]> By: admin http://thedarkeagle.com/his-due/comment-page-1/#comment-1096 admin Sat, 16 Jan 2010 21:46:11 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=203#comment-1096 Thanks for catching that Maazz. Ugh! how did I miss that? Thanks for catching that Maazz. Ugh! how did I miss that?

]]> By: Anton Gully http://thedarkeagle.com/his-due/comment-page-1/#comment-1094 Anton Gully Sat, 16 Jan 2010 20:42:42 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=203#comment-1094 With the intro and the first few sentences, mentioning 'Faust' and all, I had it ready-packaged in my head, but I think you did a good job getting there. My only complaint would be that you laid too many clues. With the intro and the first few sentences, mentioning ‘Faust’ and all, I had it ready-packaged in my head, but I think you did a good job getting there. My only complaint would be that you laid too many clues.

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