Comments on: The Dance http://thedarkeagle.com/the-dance/ one story, one thousand words Wed, 03 Mar 2010 12:32:47 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.1 hourly 1 By: Annie http://thedarkeagle.com/the-dance/comment-page-1/#comment-91 Annie Fri, 24 Jul 2009 12:28:23 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=43#comment-91 wonderfully woven, involving the reader as one of the participants who misunderstand the situation. I particular like the reference to the dance moves as a martial art and one of survival - something that many people often forget when viewing certain cultural dances. Your storytelling is brutal, honest and convincing. My entry for FF this week is here - http://annieevett.blogspot.com/2009/07/dream-catcher.html wonderfully woven, involving the reader as one of the participants who misunderstand the situation. I particular like the reference to the dance moves as a martial art and one of survival – something that many people often forget when viewing certain cultural dances.

Your storytelling is brutal, honest and convincing.

My entry for FF this week is here – http://annieevett.blogspot.com/2009/07/dream-catcher.html

]]> By: Stephen Book http://thedarkeagle.com/the-dance/comment-page-1/#comment-62 Stephen Book Sun, 12 Jul 2009 04:08:18 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=43#comment-62 Brutal story. The ending left me wanting to follow Cara and see how she would take her revenge. The depections of action and violence were well done. Brutal story. The ending left me wanting to follow Cara and see how she would take her revenge. The depections of action and violence were well done.

]]> By: KjM http://thedarkeagle.com/the-dance/comment-page-1/#comment-61 KjM Sat, 11 Jul 2009 18:44:53 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=43#comment-61 Well, I didn't see that ending from that beginning. Very, very powerful. Thank you for the glimpse into Cara and her mother's world. Her mother raised a young tigress, but, as an earlier comment mentioned, the circle of violence and vengeance continues. Very real. Very well told. Well, I didn’t see that ending from that beginning. Very, very powerful. Thank you for the glimpse into Cara and her mother’s world.

Her mother raised a young tigress, but, as an earlier comment mentioned, the circle of violence and vengeance continues. Very real. Very well told.

]]> By: James Ashelford http://thedarkeagle.com/the-dance/comment-page-1/#comment-60 James Ashelford Sat, 11 Jul 2009 17:06:19 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=43#comment-60 That was interesting, I like how you paced the reveal of what the "dance" was piece by piece. Very well-paced. My own FF submission: http://eclecticchair.wordpress.com/2009/07/10/fiction-friday-the-best-laid-plans-of-moce-and-shakespeare/ That was interesting, I like how you paced the reveal of what the “dance” was piece by piece. Very well-paced.

My own FF submission:
http://eclecticchair.wordpress.com/2009/07/10/fiction-friday-the-best-laid-plans-of-moce-and-shakespeare/

]]> By: 2mara http://thedarkeagle.com/the-dance/comment-page-1/#comment-59 2mara Sat, 11 Jul 2009 05:01:09 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=43#comment-59 I look forward to reading what's next. It's a great story. I hadn't even noticed it had run long until I read your note at the end... I was caught up in it ;-) ~2 I look forward to reading what’s next. It’s a great story. I hadn’t even noticed it had run long until I read your note at the end… I was caught up in it ;-)

~2

]]> By: Al McKillop http://thedarkeagle.com/the-dance/comment-page-1/#comment-58 Al McKillop Fri, 10 Jul 2009 19:52:49 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=43#comment-58 Really liked that. Dragged you in thinking one thing then it all twists round. Just my kind of story. What happens next???? My Fiction Friday for this week is here: http://almckillop.wordpress.com/ I think we think the same way :-) Really liked that. Dragged you in thinking one thing then it all twists round. Just my kind of story. What happens next????

My Fiction Friday for this week is here:

http://almckillop.wordpress.com/

I think we think the same way :-)

]]> By: Laura Eno http://thedarkeagle.com/the-dance/comment-page-1/#comment-57 Laura Eno Fri, 10 Jul 2009 16:17:44 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=43#comment-57 Well done! Left me wanting to know more, follow their lives. Thanks for posting this for the #fridayflash tag as well. Well done! Left me wanting to know more, follow their lives. Thanks for posting this for the #fridayflash tag as well.

]]> By: Jenny Bean http://thedarkeagle.com/the-dance/comment-page-1/#comment-55 Jenny Bean Fri, 10 Jul 2009 13:50:26 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=43#comment-55 I like how this came full circle, creating the need for Cara to continue on in her mother's footsteps but now driven by the same wrench of vengeance that churned her mother all those years. I like how this came full circle, creating the need for Cara to continue on in her mother’s footsteps but now driven by the same wrench of vengeance that churned her mother all those years.

]]> By: Tina Smith http://thedarkeagle.com/the-dance/comment-page-1/#comment-54 Tina Smith Fri, 10 Jul 2009 12:19:44 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=43#comment-54 Fantastic - I didn't want the story to end!! Fantastic – I didn’t want the story to end!!

]]> By: Jeff Posey http://thedarkeagle.com/the-dance/comment-page-1/#comment-53 Jeff Posey Fri, 10 Jul 2009 11:12:53 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=43#comment-53 Good drama, Chris. You took that writing prompt and went way beyond a simple misunderstanding. More like bone-deep revenge. Thanks for sharing you work. Good drama, Chris. You took that writing prompt and went way beyond a simple misunderstanding. More like bone-deep revenge. Thanks for sharing you work.

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