Comments on: The Vanquishing http://thedarkeagle.com/the-vanquishing/ Tue, 20 Jul 2010 12:16:32 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0 By: mazzz_in_Leeds http://thedarkeagle.com/the-vanquishing/comment-page-1/#comment-1150 mazzz_in_Leeds Tue, 02 Feb 2010 09:23:39 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=225#comment-1150 Excellent characters. It certainly feels like part of a larger piece, is there any more to come? Excellent characters. It certainly feels like part of a larger piece, is there any more to come?

]]> By: Oliva Tejeda http://thedarkeagle.com/the-vanquishing/comment-page-1/#comment-1144 Oliva Tejeda Sun, 31 Jan 2010 21:13:27 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=225#comment-1144 Great action, great dialogue! I'm glad your internet service came back on again. I wouldn't want to miss this! ~ Olivia Great action, great dialogue! I’m glad your internet service came back on again. I wouldn’t want to miss this! ~ Olivia

]]> By: Sam http://thedarkeagle.com/the-vanquishing/comment-page-1/#comment-1142 Sam Sun, 31 Jan 2010 11:15:44 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=225#comment-1142 Brilliant! Great story full of loads of symbolism and wonderful characters. This sort of thing is right up my street. I do hope there will be a continuation of the piece, I would love to read more. :) Brilliant! Great story full of loads of symbolism and wonderful characters. This sort of thing is right up my street. I do hope there will be a continuation of the piece, I would love to read more. :)

]]> By: AJ Campos http://thedarkeagle.com/the-vanquishing/comment-page-1/#comment-1141 AJ Campos Sun, 31 Jan 2010 08:07:37 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=225#comment-1141 Interesting, pregnant mommy strength combined with demonic powers! I surely would not mess with Kara. Thanks for the fun read. Interesting, pregnant mommy strength combined with demonic powers! I surely would not mess with Kara. Thanks for the fun read.

]]> By: shannon esposito http://thedarkeagle.com/the-vanquishing/comment-page-1/#comment-1138 shannon esposito Sun, 31 Jan 2010 01:07:23 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=225#comment-1138 Uninvited! Oh, this is wicked fun, do hope you continue with Danielle! Uninvited!
Oh, this is wicked fun, do hope you continue with Danielle!

]]> By: Laura Eno http://thedarkeagle.com/the-vanquishing/comment-page-1/#comment-1137 Laura Eno Sun, 31 Jan 2010 00:15:37 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=225#comment-1137 Strong women and magic - guaranteed to get two thumbs up from me. :) I'd love to see more from this world. Strong women and magic – guaranteed to get two thumbs up from me. :) I’d love to see more from this world.

]]> By: David G Shrock http://thedarkeagle.com/the-vanquishing/comment-page-1/#comment-1132 David G Shrock Sat, 30 Jan 2010 04:08:40 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=225#comment-1132 Another fun piece. The spells are nice. As Jodi mentioned, could use more description, sure. But it's good for flash, the strength lies within the dialogue and interaction here. And who doesn't enjoy two women in a magic fight? Another fun piece. The spells are nice. As Jodi mentioned, could use more description, sure. But it’s good for flash, the strength lies within the dialogue and interaction here. And who doesn’t enjoy two women in a magic fight?

]]> By: Eric J. Krause http://thedarkeagle.com/the-vanquishing/comment-page-1/#comment-1131 Eric J. Krause Sat, 30 Jan 2010 02:15:35 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=225#comment-1131 Very cool story. Both women in this piece are quite interesting and you they interact well in their battle. Nicely done! Very cool story. Both women in this piece are quite interesting and you they interact well in their battle. Nicely done!

]]> By: Jodi Cleghorn http://thedarkeagle.com/the-vanquishing/comment-page-1/#comment-1130 Jodi Cleghorn Sat, 30 Jan 2010 02:03:04 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=225#comment-1130 They say the hearth is the heart of the home... and you illustrate this perfectly. I agree - this feels like a smaller window into a bigger piece. The role of daughter as protector, on two separate but interconnected levels Dialogue rich short stories are my favourite and you employ the dialogue well with the minimal use of direction to distract from the intensity of the power struggle building between the two women. I'd have liked to see an original take on the building of magic within... I remember from your NaNo piece you used colour to really excellent ends. What I think might be missing is the sensory nature of story - smell particularly... maybe the subtle smell of burning hair as the Kara gets closer to the fire (you mention the small hair singeing). I'm a big one for employing all five of the senses. They say the hearth is the heart of the home… and you illustrate this perfectly.

I agree – this feels like a smaller window into a bigger piece. The role of daughter as protector, on two separate but interconnected levels

Dialogue rich short stories are my favourite and you employ the dialogue well with the minimal use of direction to distract from the intensity of the power struggle building between the two women.

I’d have liked to see an original take on the building of magic within… I remember from your NaNo piece you used colour to really excellent ends.

What I think might be missing is the sensory nature of story – smell particularly… maybe the subtle smell of burning hair as the Kara gets closer to the fire (you mention the small hair singeing). I’m a big one for employing all five of the senses.

]]> By: Cascade Lily http://thedarkeagle.com/the-vanquishing/comment-page-1/#comment-1129 Cascade Lily Sat, 30 Jan 2010 01:55:07 +0000 http://thedarkeagle.com/?p=225#comment-1129 A bit of witch v. demoness biffo - lovely! A bit of witch v. demoness biffo – lovely!

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