Comments on: Wizard’s Last Hope

By: 2mara

2mara — Thu, 22 Oct 2009 10:58:06 +0000

I told you I would make it by, and man am I glad I did. What a great story. Um, Chris… where’s the rest?

By: Avery K. Tingle

Avery K. Tingle — Wed, 21 Oct 2009 02:49:35 +0000

…WOW!! FLIPPING AWESOME!! Please do a sequel that begins with ‘ten years later’…

By: Chance

Chance — Sun, 18 Oct 2009 11:46:24 +0000

Gripping and a nice sense of urgency in there. Good characters

By: C. A. Beninati

C. A. Beninati — Sat, 17 Oct 2009 22:35:42 +0000

commas*

By: C. A. Beninati

C. A. Beninati — Sat, 17 Oct 2009 22:35:22 +0000

I really like where this seems to be going. It was a little bit hard to follow at times, but I think a few commans could help that out.

Great story!

By: Jodi MacArthur

Jodi MacArthur — Sat, 17 Oct 2009 21:27:27 +0000

I hate it when people take advantage of young people!Deceit used for whatever purpose is always wrong. What will he do when Emily discovers who was truly the cause of her mother’s murder? Off with his head! You drew this anger from me. Always a good sign of good writing. Keep it up.

By: mazzz_in_Leeds

mazzz_in_Leeds — Sat, 17 Oct 2009 17:19:26 +0000

any little girl who comes up with a line like: “I’ll see you dead before I’m twenty” is my hero!
If only I wasn’t so far past 20 I’d be looking out for occasions on which to use that line

Stands very well on its own, but also would go very well as part of a longer piece (so which is it, then…?)

By: ganymeder

ganymeder — Sat, 17 Oct 2009 16:31:25 +0000

This was really original, and I don’t usually like magical stories. This was awesome. Great work.

By: Deanna Schrayer

Deanna Schrayer — Sat, 17 Oct 2009 15:38:14 +0000

I’m with everyone else – I want more, and hope this is just the beginning.
Fantastic!

By: Shannon Esposito

Shannon Esposito — Sat, 17 Oct 2009 14:36:00 +0000

Wow,this is wonderful…you packed so much into one piece- magic, betrayal,revenge! This is part of something bigger, right? It feels like its going to expand itself whether you planned on it or not..lol. Hats off to ya!